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Oge  Igboegbunam's avatar

This article lets me know that I do not need to back down in the face of opposition, especially when I require a man's cooperation in getting something done or obtaining something from him.

I am not a fan of oppositional men but I live in a country with a significant Islamic population wherein I meet more than my fair share of such males.

I have learned to have a high frustration tolerance in the face of such men's hostile uncooperativeness. Naturally, this has made me less amenable to doing things men's way in the Abrahamic reality but becoming self-interested and resistant to subjugation.

Hopefully, I will become masterful with each passing day without the attendant feeling of resentment that ensues when people meet a masterful human being used to having her way and taking no prisoners.

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

That sounds rough. It sounds like it sparked something.

Lightning Shadow Crossroads's avatar

I admire your gratitude to such a series 🙏

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

Thank you. I’m behind on writing right now. Back will be writing again soon. Needed is bit of a break

pupmorningstar's avatar

Chapter 6 feels like the moment after impact.

Everything up to this point has been building pressure. Here it feels like something internal finally cracks. Not in spectacle. In recognition.

There is a shift in tone that reads less like observation and more like reckoning. The wasteland is no longer just a place you are walking through. It is something you are actively confronting within yourself. That distinction matters. It is one thing to diagnose decay. It is another to admit where it lives in you.

What stood out to me is the stripping away of self deception. There is a quiet brutality in that. No villain to blame. No convenient external scapegoat. Just the realization that survival strategies have consequences. That numbness protects and erodes at the same time.

This chapter feels intimate. Almost surgical. You are cutting into the interior architecture and naming what has been running beneath the surface. That kind of writing requires courage because it exposes not just systems, but self.

I also sense the beginning of choice here. Not optimism. Not redemption. Just choice. The awareness that once something is seen clearly, it cannot be unseen. And once you see it, you are accountable to it.

As someone who has spent years dismantling inherited frameworks and doing the uncomfortable work of shadow integration, I recognize this terrain. The hardest confrontations are rarely external. They are the moments you realize how much of the wasteland you internalized in order to survive it.

Chapter 6 does not offer relief. It offers clarity. And clarity is heavier than comfort.

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

Your comments are like reviews. I’m happy you enjoyed this much to not only take the time to read and to have such a great comment to go with it. thank you so much for that. you are very accurate with you comments.

Hannah Torkelson's avatar

This is so cohesive and well done. You've got a pull with your words, if that makes sense!

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

Makes sense, thank you Hannah

Storm Whisperer's avatar

What an incredible chapter Leo. The tension is so subtle and atmospheric. The pacing, the sensory details and the unsettling change in Mr Elliott, it all worked so well together to create a dread that feels too close for comfort. Oh that final metallic click, that I felt in my ribs. Super Job. 🤍

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

that’s where you were suppose to feel that. Thank you Nerra, I’m glad that all landed. I loved the pacing on this chapter. I read it a few times and played around with the pacing on this. I must’ve read it 5 times, I wrote it like this and I felt it in my stomach. it might’ve the stomach issues I had dealt with the past couple weeks, but I couldn’t read it again after switching to this spacing. I knew it was really really good at this point.

HVR's avatar

This makes Mr. Elliott seem even worse. Like wtf.

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

He’s probably the good guy in his eyes. lol

The Secret Ingredient's avatar

This completely pulled me in. I felt that delicious tension of needing to know what would happen next, line by line. I also couldn’t help but picture it in black and white, almost like a film from the forties — maybe because of the way she calls him Mr. Elliott. There’s something wonderfully cinematic about it.

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

I’m glad you enjoyed it. There are people that still live in this kind of world. Thank you for reading.

Terod Naej's avatar

Very creative Leo.

Who or what inspired the character of Mr. Elliott?

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

I’ve met people like him. He is a combination of a few people. I know some people that wish they were as formidable as him, which is scary in itself. I think I just read too many Robert Greene books and this is what I pictured.

Emily Jean's avatar

the bunker reveal was sooo good. that metallic click as the world ending sound?? chills

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

It was the sound of everyone getting locked in.

Hina Gondal's avatar

Interesting

AsukaHotaru's avatar

The metallic click at the end made my stomach drop... like the world got locked outside and nobody asked permission.

Leo thee Lemon's avatar

yes exactly, I wanted stomaches to drop